“Moon man” by Abhay…
“Moon man” by Abhay…
In a glistening gleam of darkness, the moon man shone as a bright round shaped moon curled up in the shimmering seat of space from the swifting sphere. Every dingy night , he was filled with envy and morose as he was drifting through the sphere. Later that day, I heard a melodious sound from the earth about people dancing fascinatingly with enjoyment. Abruptly, the bulging and shooting star , passed across the dark pitched sky as quick as a flash !!! The night creatures fled in terror at the surprising crash of the bulging comet…. “THUMP !!! AHH!!!” the birds murmured with fright. When, the moon man crash landed on earth,he saw hundreds of people in a occupied , busiest town which made him perplexed of these people? Deeply, the government officials held him from the CCTV cameras and he was called a ‘ mysterious invader ‘. the police van came in a flash and took the moon man away to jail. INCREDIBLE!!! “ Why shall I stay in this gloomy and glum room??” he thought.
Which was monstrous.
I like my writing which shows a catchy start of the story and a use of grammar,punctuation and descriptive setting
i like your description of a extended piece of writing
I really liked the way you used alliteration at the start of the sentence and how you copied the ‘Moon Man’ story in your own words
You used an abundance of adjectives and descriptive vocabulary. Your choice of words really sets an image into my mind. It is is good.
thank you aditya
thank you aditiya for feedback
keep it up, dear Abhay. U have the creativity which should take you to greater reaches beyond the Moon.
Wow,that is the best piece of writing.Hope that does not happen.
Abhay putta, good start as a Blogger! right usage of phrases and vocabulary.. Going forward, you can consider having some pictures, sketches or emoticons to support the blog.
Well done.. Keep it up my dear!
Very good Abhay.. loved it. Moon man nicely depicted.. looking forward for next episodes and more blogs from you..
Keep it up.. All the best!
Very good Abhay.. Moon man nicely depicted.. looking forward for next episodes and more blogs from you..
Keep it up.. All the best!