“Moon man” by Abhay…

“Moon man” by Abhay…

In a glistening gleam of darkness, the moon man shone as a bright round shaped  moon curled up in the shimmering seat of space from the swifting sphere. Every dingy night , he was filled with envy and morose as he was drifting through the sphere. Later that day, I heard a melodious sound from the earth  about people dancing  fascinatingly with enjoyment. Abruptly, the  bulging and shooting star , passed across the  dark pitched sky as quick as a flash !!!  The night  creatures fled in terror at the surprising crash of the bulging comet…. “THUMP !!!  AHH!!!” the birds murmured with fright.   When, the moon man crash landed on earth,he saw  hundreds of  people in a occupied , busiest town which made him perplexed of these people? Deeply, the government officials held him from the CCTV cameras and he was called a ‘ mysterious invader  ‘. the police van came in a flash and took the moon man away to jail. INCREDIBLE!!! “ Why shall I stay in this gloomy and glum room??” he thought.
Which was monstrous.

11 Replies to ““Moon man” by Abhay…”

  1. I like my writing which shows a catchy start of the story and a use of grammar,punctuation and descriptive setting

  2. I really liked the way you used alliteration at the start of the sentence and how you copied the ‘Moon Man’ story in your own words

  3. You used an abundance of adjectives and descriptive vocabulary. Your choice of words really sets an image into my mind. It is is good.

  4. keep it up, dear Abhay. U have the creativity which should take you to greater reaches beyond the Moon.

  5. Abhay putta, good start as a Blogger! right usage of phrases and vocabulary.. Going forward, you can consider having some pictures, sketches or emoticons to support the blog.

    Well done.. Keep it up my dear!

  6. Very good Abhay.. loved it. Moon man nicely depicted.. looking forward for next episodes and more blogs from you..
    Keep it up.. All the best!

  7. Very good Abhay.. Moon man nicely depicted.. looking forward for next episodes and more blogs from you..
    Keep it up.. All the best!

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